MorganKarma Posted January 6, 2011 Share Posted January 6, 2011 Disclaimer: This is a Poem I wrote a few months ago, I am wanting to have people comment on this if you want to. I would also like constructive crtiticism on it too. Thanks! This is a the day, to shine out above the rest, To out rhyme the very best. They think they're better than you, You don't need to take that, No need to act a fool. You can show can you are cool, They taught you well in school, Never to act a fool. This is your day, To show up the competition. Teach them who is boss, And who is just bitchin'. You should be tired of their whining, Tired of their crying. You're a big boy now, and nothing can stop you from getting started. So rhyme your soul out, Time the beats to drop out. Feel the groove and the bass, The treble that was misplaced. This is your day son, This is the day son, Never forget it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BooT Posted January 7, 2011 Share Posted January 7, 2011 Honestly speaking from a poet's viewpoint, this is not poetry, it's more of a spit/rap type thing. But that is just from my viewpoint. There are many types of poetry. By the way, typos are killer in poetry and/or any written document. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorganKarma Posted January 7, 2011 Author Share Posted January 7, 2011 Oh yeah, I know. I've been writing stuff for over 7 years now. I think some of my better works are my short stories. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Geno Posted January 7, 2011 Share Posted January 7, 2011 Honestly speaking from a poet's viewpoint, this is not poetry, it's more of a spit/rap type thing. But that is just from my viewpoint. There are many types of poetry. I felt the same way, It seemed more like a rap then your typical poetry, but it was good Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake Posted January 7, 2011 Share Posted January 7, 2011 Damn i thought this was going to be a deep poem so i could steal it and give it to my mom. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorganKarma Posted January 7, 2011 Author Share Posted January 7, 2011 I have new inventive types of writing that I like to express, it's not going to always be you typical type of poem, it will be creative, because originality counts. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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