Turi Guiliano Posted October 17, 2010 Share Posted October 17, 2010 ok guys so this is the first script, i put blazzed in green, Fatal (the main character/ aka john) is in pink. Dullknife is in blue Blade the warden is in red. Regular black is supposed to be kind of a narrative, and asterisks are either screenshots or for *laz humor* is just lazaruz being lazaruz. Its the first real step in making this movie. http://zhost.hellsgamers.com/u/qo/jailbreak_script_part_1.doc Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JJK Posted October 17, 2010 Share Posted October 17, 2010 Can you copy paste or pastebin for me porfavor? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turi Guiliano Posted October 17, 2010 Author Share Posted October 17, 2010 ill inbox it to you, check your messages Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dullknife Posted October 17, 2010 Share Posted October 17, 2010 I like it damn I talk alot and of course me with awp rebeling lol If it was a m4 I would believe it more I am alright with awp. m4 I am beast/god. Yes Sounds good. So where is the haircut scene other then that I love it. I wanted to say inb4 others QQ with no haircut scene. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turi Guiliano Posted October 17, 2010 Author Share Posted October 17, 2010 i made a haircut scene specifically for those people, well kinda, they get haircuts though Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GoCrzy Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Eh... If this is to go on YouTube or whatever video site only people from HG would understand any of this. You need to make some exposition to start a good plot, then continue it: create a setting, create characters, create a reason for the characters to be in that setting, create a problem, create a climax, and create a resolution. Right now it just feels like you jump into a random game of JB. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roley Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Hate Jailbreak. Love the script. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turi Guiliano Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 Eh... If this is to go on YouTube or whatever video site only people from HG would understand any of this. You need to make some exposition to start a good plot, then continue it: create a setting, create characters, create a reason for the characters to be in that setting, create a problem, create a climax, and create a resolution. Right now it just feels like you jump into a random game of JB. This is supposed to be a triliogy so this is all a process. The first half or so of the script is the exposition, the setting is the map, characters made, problem = John needs to find a way to get out. climax = This is only the first movie but for the first part it would be Dullknife shooting Blade, and resolution i can quickly add in. FYI, im thinking movie number 2 is gonna be a detailed and extensively written experience of John dropping the soap in the showers and conan right behind him and John learns that Dullknife killed the warden. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GoCrzy Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Still, unless you play JB on a regular basis, you cannot understand any of this. You need to include stuff that can entertain a wider audience, so yeah go ahead and include funny stuff that JB players will get but also make sure that the majority of your jokes are funny for everyone and that a majority of your plot is understandable for everyone. Also, your script has no action or setting. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blade Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Its a movie. The Brit dies first. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cal45 Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Only read the first line and I was already struck with a w-t-f. You do realize that a prisoner doesn't have a "resume" with his crimes on it lmao. It's called a file or a record. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turi Guiliano Posted October 18, 2010 Author Share Posted October 18, 2010 Only read the first line and I was already struck with a w-t-f. You do realize that a prisoner doesn't have a "resume" with his crimes on it lmao. It's called a file or a record. Damn i knew i shouldve done this in more than 1 day :/ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dullknife Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 I still enjoy it but only because I know wtf is going on and if you need more then one day thats cool take your time no one is forcing you to do it in a week or day. P.S. YEA I KILLED LEAD/WARDEN FREEDAY. lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheCakeLord Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 Still, unless you play JB on a regular basis, you cannot understand any of this. You need to include stuff that can entertain a wider audience, so yeah go ahead and include funny stuff that JB players will get but also make sure that the majority of your jokes are funny for everyone and that a majority of your plot is understandable for everyone. Also, your script has no action or setting. i think the movie should only be funny if you play HG JB, no need to make it for a wider audience Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plaayer Posted October 18, 2010 Share Posted October 18, 2010 *cue mass fk* ???? LOL. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GoCrzy Posted October 19, 2010 Share Posted October 19, 2010 i think the movie should only be funny if you play HG JB, no need to make it for a wider audience So this is a movie to entertain maybe 10 people who are active on this site and JB? The best option for this movie would be from an HG promotional standpoint. Basically, make it awesome for everyone, but especially awesome for people who know what is going on. That way more people are interested in the server/HG and how sexyawesome we are. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
conan Posted October 19, 2010 Share Posted October 19, 2010 i have an idea how about you plan out an awesome ad promotional trailer and then you can build off of that Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turi Guiliano Posted October 19, 2010 Author Share Posted October 19, 2010 But how many people would search "HG Jailbreak" on youtube? We can make a proffesional trailer like conan said. Btw Conan i am sooo directing your buttrape shower scene in the 2nd part. Fatal crouches you go behind him "Hold still little man" then Fatal squeals like a pig, and a smoke goes off in front of the showers. We can always add some action during the actual shooting of the movie.That reminds me, how are we gonna shoot this? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
conan Posted October 19, 2010 Share Posted October 19, 2010 someone could use fraps to record they can be in spectate and you can have more than one person in spec recording so you get different angles, and I think there is another hg jb server that they use for testing so if you ask they might be able to use it Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GoCrzy Posted October 20, 2010 Share Posted October 20, 2010 Please no fraps, such bad frame rates, someone use source recorder if your system can handle it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
conan Posted October 23, 2010 Share Posted October 23, 2010 how about you just record several rounds on jb n make it into a trailer add epic music and a cool voice narrator Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lt. Richard Posted October 23, 2010 Share Posted October 23, 2010 CONAN I DRUNK YOUR MILKSHAKE. BUT YET YOU DIDNT ADD ME INTO IT?! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Turi Guiliano Posted October 23, 2010 Author Share Posted October 23, 2010 how about you just record several rounds on jb n make it into a trailer add epic music and a cool voice narrator I wouldnt be recording anything, i thought blazzed was gonna do it Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xIFATALSKILLZIx Posted October 25, 2010 Share Posted October 25, 2010 i think its over turi.....i have been resisting to post on any of these script threads or jb movie threads....but i think its time to move on..... i think ur "boy" blazedd gave up on his own idea Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jesus2 Posted October 25, 2010 Share Posted October 25, 2010 i think its over turi.....i have been resisting to post on any of these script threads or jb movie threads....but i think its time to move on..... i think ur "boy" blazedd gave up on his own idea Yea he quit jb I think hemad Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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